Anyone have an opinion on my poem?

‘Twas an alien world…

‘Twas an alien world,
The one I lingered above.

Were those dunes of pale brown
Ones of sand, or clouds’ surface?

The surfaces descend into oblivion,
Or curl unto themselves, another land.

This plane is covered by a thin film,
One of dust, or of mist.

Dual suns sit stagnant,
One still high, the other resting below the horizon.

Was the latter an entity simply hazed,
Or a doppelganger sprawled across the sea?

Lines appear and disappear,
Surely an ancient city cowering behind its walls.

And a glimmer, a point in space
Sparkling in the boundless sand.

‘Tis but a lone caravan
Crawling along the waving atmosphere.

An oasis becomes in the wasteland,
Quickly, before the rays pass the tepid surface.

Do the waves pulsate across the midday ground
Or wash over my imagination and cloud my vision?

My lids fall but for a moment
And eyes are cleansed by burning tears.

And as they rise like curtains
I see no roaming sand.

No aquatic mirage dancing in the heat,
Nor wand’ring merchant dripping down the landscape.

The sun has left the heartbroken sky,
Stolen by the fateful passing of hours.

The dunes are gone, wiped from my view,
Replaced by fluttering waters and solid ground.

Was the mute Saharan tundra,
Or was it not?

The air drifts from my chest, my eyes close,
As I long to return to my once-foreign home.





Answer :
My honest opinion? I think it's beautiful. I mean, just reading the first few lines i felt like i was somewhere else. I think you have real talent. When you can take someone out of their lives and take them somewhere else for a moment of their life, you know you have something good.